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GA Review

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Reviewer: –– Jezhotwells (talk) 23:12, 8 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Checking against GA criteria

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    However, Only Fools and Horses spin-off The Green Green Grass was subsequently produced before the prequel was again commissioned in July 2009. is a little clunsy. cvan this be rephrased better?  Done
    At the Town Hall, Joan enquires to Mr. Johnson (Colin Prockter) about applying for a flat ... "enquires to"?  Done
    At The Nag's Head, Freddie and Reg meet and Reg invites him to his to continue drinking. I know what "his" means , but remember the reader, who may not be familiar with English colloquial speech.  Done
    Freddie has a dislike for the Trotters, however he has the opposite view of Joan, whom he realises is a Trotter after he buys her a drink. A little clumsy.  Done
    At the cinema, Joan is promoted to part-time assistant manager; Rayner tells her that the safe sometimes contains over £2000 at weekends, which she later tells Freddie after he goes round to her house to offer Reg some work (after telling him to meet him at the pub). Should be a new paragraph here. Also a lot of information to cram into one sentence. Consider splitting.  Done
    As March comes, Joan has a Marilyn Monroe hairstyle and the safe at the cinema is broken in to. Again a bit of editing here. As it stands this implies some sort of connection between the month of March and the break in.  Done
    Their application is successful in August, September sees the Trotters view a flat in the new Sir Walter Raleigh House (later renamed Nelson Mandela house), which they have moved into in October. Whose application? The sentence before concludes with Freddie and Joan, but I think you mean that Reg and Joan are moving into the flat. We also have rather a lot of information crammed into this sentence and it is not exactly clear.  Done
    After telling him that Del will be very rich one day, she sees Freddie on a balcony in a tower opposite; she shows him Rodney and nods her head, to his delight. Need to explain that Del is short for Derek.  Done
    The plot section needs a thorough overhaul to be written in plain clear English, short sentences. Everything has to be made crystal clear to readers unfamiliar with the story and the sequel Only Fools and Horse.  Done
    I made a number of copy-edits.[1]
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    All on-line sources are live. I had a little trouble with the Times link[2]. Please be aware that all of the News International content will cease to be free from 1 June 2010
    References are to reliable sources. All references support the cited statements.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    Broad and focussed.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    One image used and correctly licensed and captioned.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    On hold for seven days for the above issues to be addressed. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 00:08, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    Amendments made, hope this is better. mattbr 12:50, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    Very good, I am happy to pass this as a good article. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 21:01, 12 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks, mattbr 09:58, 17 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]