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Reviewer: Vortex3427 (talk · contribs) 07:18, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
Taking this up.
@Sawyer-mcdonell: I haven't even heard of South Ossetia before looking at this, so feel free to disagree, but here are my initial thoughts. I will be back tomorrow with spotchecks and maybe more suggestions.
- Link syncretism in the lede and both instances of Middle Ages.
- Done -s
- Are there any good sources you've found on the treatment of various religious groups by South Ossetian laws and authorities e.g. ban of Jehovah’s Witnesses, religion in the constitution, South Ossetia's current views of GOC? There's some information in these U.S. Government reports and other installments of the Report on International Religious Freedom: Georgia, which cite reports from Democracy Research Institute, a think tank, such as this one. However, I don't know about their reliability or reputation.
Also, are there any reliable religious demographics for the state, since I was interested in the percentage of Christians vs followers of uatsdin? I downloaded and machine-translated the 2015 census but it doesn't make any mention of religion despite this (so it may contain incorrect information?) saying otherwise (although the census would be of dubious reliability regardless).(saw, ref 5, sorry, but why don't you use the approximate figures from refs 4 and 5)- This is a tricky issue - due to the geopolitical situation (South Ossetia being heavily supported by Russia) I'm skeptical of the reliability of the US State Department, as well as the reliability of the Georgian and South Ossetian governments, for obvious reasons. I can start workshopping a "religious freedom" section though, and let me know what you think.
South Ossetian Orthodox, along with the Abkhazian Orthodox Church
Add "Church", or alternatively South Ossentian and Abkhazian Orthodox Churches.- Done
After the establishment of the independent church
When was the South Ossentian Orthodox Church established? Also the next sentence starts withAfter the ROC denied to incorporate the South Ossetians into the Moscow Patriarchate
("denied incorporating"), so maybe the "After the establishment" sentence could be placed before the "In 1992" sentence for chronology?- Reworded for clarity. All of this happened in ~1992, so I think the chronology is consistent, but let me know if there's still issues with it.
Styr Nykhas (Great Council)
This is what language? It might be a good idea to include translations of the religions in Russian and/or Ossetian if you can find them, although this is optional and I don't see similar articles doing this consistently.- it's Ossetian - added
the Alans (ancestors of the Ossetians) nominally converted to Christianity
You mention in the lede and the next section this is because of Byzantine influences, but not in the section about Christianity- added
only one Jew, an elderly woman, remained in the Tskhinvali
According to the NBC source, she's the only Jew in South Ossetia.- switched -S
@Vortex3427 I've addressed the suggestions so far, with the exception of the religious freedom stuff, which I aim to get done with today. Thanks for your feedback! :) sawyer * he/they * talk 19:40, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
- I've added a religious freedom section based on the State Dep report; I've decided to attribute it in the text just for transparency. sawyer * he/they * talk 20:15, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
- @Sawyer-mcdonell: Putting this on hold.
- Spotchecks
- Lomtadze & Janjghava 2018:
Tskhinvali, the largest city in South Ossetia, historically had a large Jewish community, which sometimes outnumbered the Georgian population.
Expand citation from p. 17 to pp. 17–18 to cover the last bit.Relations between the Tskhinvali Jews and the other ethnic groups of the city were largely peaceful, although there was tension and some violence in the period following the Bolshevik Revolution.
should be cited to p. 18 instead.
- Matsuzato 2010:
led by Alexandr Pukhate, which aimed to separate from the Georgian Church
His first name is given as "Aleksandr" on p. 274. (I see Conroy uses this spelling)In 2005, the Alania Diocese was created, and Pukhate consecrated a bishop by the Synod.
Referred to as the "Alan Diocese" in the source, although Conroy clarifies the naming. Maybe append this with a citation of Conroy?
- Conroy 2015:
- Everything checks out.
- Foltz 2019:
- Same here.
- Lomtadze & Janjghava 2018:
- Suggestions
- In the lede,
Uatsdin
should be italicized;Ossetian
andnationalist-oriented
to Ossetian nationalism. Also link eparchy capital of South Ossetia Tskhinvali
Add commas or rearrange.the ROC denied these requests
include motives, e.g. Matsuzato, p. 283 "considering canonical principle and friendly relations with the OCG [GOC] as more important"some five parishes remained with the Georgian Church
Worth including that 15 local churches joined the South Ossetian orthodox community? (Matsuzato, p. 274)denied to incorporate
sounds awkward somehow. "Denied incorporating" or "refused to incorporate"- From Matsuzato, you could add that the South Ossetian Orthodox "gained the status of deanery (blagochinnyi) in September 20" (p. 284)
efforts to organize it
"It", more specifically, Ossetian "mythology to formal religion".One major annual ritual in South Ossetia takes place at the Usanet dzuar shrine
Since this part is specific to South Ossetia it might be appropriate to give more info on the origins of this tradition as Foltz does (or the info might be better on the currently redlinked article).Precisely because the lines between Ossetian tradition and imported Abrahamic religions are often so fluid, the Uatsdin movement has triggered strong condemnations and oflcial complaints from Ossetia’s Christian and Muslim leaders.
Info might be worth including (Foltz, p. 331).
- In the lede,
- — VORTEX3427 (Talk!) 08:37, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
- All great suggestions - will ping you once I've implemented them! sawyer * he/they * talk 00:00, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
- @Vortex3427 have done all of them! Regarding the Usanet dzuar shrine bit, I added some more information about it because it is still a redlink. Perhaps if it becomes a bluelink, that information can be moved to the article itself, but I think as it is right now, it's better to give more context than less. Hope this is sufficient! Thanks so much for such a thorough review!! sawyer * he/they * talk 00:58, 3 March 2024 (UTC)
- All great suggestions - will ping you once I've implemented them! sawyer * he/they * talk 00:00, 3 March 2024 (UTC)