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Author disclosure: I am a grandson of Mr. Petersime. With respect to Wikipedia’s concern with close association of author to subject I am confident that I have created an accurate, neutral and objective description of his life and accomplishments, relying heavily on documentation from reliable sources. Lvaughn7 (talk) 17:06, 20 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

B-class review

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  • Lead is missing blue links, please some per WP:BTW. The article has some hyperlinks but can have more. For example the term 'wake of World War II' should be piped to Aftermath of World War II prev dels. Warsaw should be linked to Warsaw. Ditto for other mentioned cities like Berlin. Concepts like egg incubator should be linked. "Protestant leaders" in Poland could be linked to protestantism in Poland.
  • please add a biographical infobox. See WP:INFOBOX
  • many paragraphs are missing end-of-paragraph citation. Please ensure each sentence (and certainly each paragraph) is referenced. See WP:V.
  • if entities like International Council of Religious Education and Christian Rural Overseas Program are notable but have no articles about them yet please link them anyway per WP:RED. "Polish Minister of Agriculture" should be piped to Ministry of Agriculture (Poland). If it was 1946 then it was Stanisław Mikołajczyk.
  • "The decision was made to direct the aid to Poland and arrangements were made with the Polish Minister of Agriculture." Does the source say minister, not Ministry? If so, please name the minister in question.
  • can we add pictures to this article? A picture of the subject would be very useful. A picture of the Petersime Chapel should also be possible to obtain, for example
  • if a digitized copy of the paper exists, please link it for references like "Inventor Dies at 85". Los Angeles Times. Los Angeles, California. 26 January 1958.
  • Lastly, there is no such place as 'The Methodist Home' in Warsaw, Poland. What does the source say? This also illustrates the article's current haphazard approach to referencing. The sentence that mentions that term is unreferenced, and the following sentence is referenced to [1] which does not mention this term. I'll repeat: each and every sentence needs its own reference to facilitate verification. Anyway, I suspect TMH is some crappy translation of a Polish term, effectively mangled beyone recognition because the original writer/journalist didn't feel like bothering with proper note taking. In case the source contains more information, here's the pl wiki list of Protestant churches in Warsaw: pl:Kategoria:Zbory protestanckie w Warszawie, but not a single one contains the word 'home' in its name (well, one does but it was founded in 1988 so it's not the right one).
  • Overall, nice job. This is close to B-class, and with the above fixes it should be GA-able. Cheers, --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 07:20, 15 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]