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Not required, but some of your bibliographic entries give publication locations, while others do not. If you're thinking of heading towards FA - you'll need to standardize that.
"The period was marked by an endurance of ancient Assyrian culture" ... "an endurance" is awkward to my reading - perhaps "The period was marked by the continuance of ancient Assyrian culture.."
"The period was marked by an endurance of ancient Assyrian culture, traditions and religion, despite the lack of an Assyrian kingdom, but also by the extinction of the Assyrian dialect of the Akkadian language, which had by the 5th century BC been completely replaced by Aramaic." ... quite the run on sentence. May I suggest breaking it into two ... maybe "The period was marked by the continuance of ancient Assyrian culture, traditions and religion, despite the lack of an Assyrian kingdom. The Assyrian dialect of the Akkadian language was completely replaced by Aramaic by the 5th century BC."
"The population density of Parthian Assyria was only comparable to the region at its height under the Neo-Assyrian Empire." I think you mean "The population density of Parthian Assyria reached heights not seen since the Neo-Assyrian Empire."
"Archaeological surveys of the Assyrian heartland" - can we come up with another phrase so we don't keep repeating "Assyrian heartland"?
I agree that "Assyrian heartland" is cumbersome. Researchers use it presumably to avoid the confusion just "Assyria" could bring (map of the heartland vs. the Assyrian Empire) so I don't really know what to replace it with. It might be possible to just go with "Assyria" in at least some of the places where the article currently uses "Assyrian heartland"? Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:03, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've kept some uses of "Assyrian heartland" but also switched others (where alternatives worked just as well) up with "Assyrian core territory", just "Assyria" and "northern Mesopotamia". Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:38, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"forcefully deported, to the now prosperous Babylonia or elsewhere" do we really need "now prosperous"? If we were discussing voluntary movement, the state of prosperity of Babylonia would make sense, but I'm not seeing the relevance in the context of forced deportations
"Under the Achaemenids, Assyria was organized into the province[a] Athura (Aθūrā).[b][17] Some former Assyrian territory was also incorporated into the satrapy of Media (Mada)." Suggest "Under the Achaemenids, most of Assyria was organized into the province[a] Athura (Aθūrā),[b][17] but some was incorporated into the satrapy of Media (Mada)." as this avoids the confusion caused by the "Assyria became Athura" totally impression the first sentence gives that is then contradicted by the second sentence.
"The organization of Assyria into the single administrative unit Athura effectively kept the region on the map as a distinct political entity throughout the time of Achaemenid rule." suggest moving this up in the paragraph to the parts about the province, it feels very tacked on here where we're discussing culture/language/etc
"Arbela, Lair (called Lahiru in Neo-Assyrian times), Arzuhin (called Arzuḫina in Neo-Assyrian times) and Matalubaš (called Ubaše in Neo-Assyrian times)," can we condense the "called XXX in Neo-Assyrian times" bit into something that doesn't break up the flow of the prose so much?
The names are not really necessary at all, I added them since the cities don't currently have articles under either their Persian or Neo-Assyrian names. They could either be removed outright or placed in notes, what do you think? Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:03, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"The historian Diodorus Siculus mentioned in his writings" ... suggest "The historian Diodorus Siculus mentioned in his 1st century BC writings" to make it clear they aren't quite contemporary.
"Though Assyria remained in the shadow of Babylonia during the time of Seleucid rule,[25] there were significant developments in Assyria as well." ... clunky. Suggest "Though Assyria remained in the shadow of Babylonia, there were still significant developments in (insert what general areas there were developments in - political, cultural, economic?)"
Changed to "Though Assyria remained in the shadow of Babylonia, the region was far from wholly neglected" which should be clearer and less clunky. Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:03, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"between the Parthians and the Roman Empire." ... except it's not the Roman Empire in 96 BC. Bad Ichthy, no biscuit!
"several small and semi-independent kingdoms of Assyrian character and large Assyrian populations" suggest "several small and semi-independent kingdoms of Assyrian character and large populations"
"density of settlements that is only comparable to what the region was like under the Neo-Assyrian Empire,[26] for the first time since the 7th century BC." clunky - that last phrase feels very "tacked on". Suggest perhaps "density of settlements that is only comparable to what the region was like under the Neo-Assyrian Empire." or if you just must have the date "density of settlements that is only comparable to what the region was like under the Neo-Assyrian Empire in the 7th century BC."
"en Assorr-heden ("Ashur has given a brother, a late version of the name Aššur-aḫu-iddina" is there a missing close quote - aka "en Assorr-heden ("Ashur has given a brother", a late version of the name Aššur-aḫu-iddina"?
"official governmental seats under any of the succeeding empires" - does this mean ALL the succeeding empires i.e. through Parthian times, or just the two that are introduced at the start of this paragraph? It's a bit confusing
This means ALL succeeding empires; the palaces that were used in some cities (i.e. Assur) for instance under the Parthians were new buildings. Unsure how to clarify in the text. Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:03, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've changed it to "that any of the old Assyrian palaces were ever again used as official governmental seats after the fall of the Neo-Assyrian Empire" which is as concise and clear as I could get it, does that work? Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:38, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
as is a Roman aquila (eagle standard) - okay... that's ... surprising. Any background on that?
Looks like I sadly misinterpreted this. The journal article called it an "eagle mount" but it seems like that means a military belt fitting. I've fixed the error and added some more detail. Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:41, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
General - is there anything we can say about culture - literature? art? daily life? daily life? economy? society? demography?
The number of sources and archaeological finds from post-imperial times is significantly less than for preceding periods, which means that it is difficult to determine a lot beyond broad historical developments and individual factoids. I think this might also explain why Assyriologists tend to not focus on this period a lot (for example the 2017 A Companion to Assyria which is cited quite a lot has a section on economy, society and daily life for every Assyrian period except the early and post-imperial ones). I think the only portion of the post-imperial period where society could be explored in any detail is Parthian Assur but it's criminally understudied. AFAIK the only real comprehensive look is the 1933 Die Partherstadt Assur by the people who excavated the Parthian portions of the city but it's 89 years old (WP:AGEMATTERS), published in Nazi Germany, written in German (not fully confident in my abilities to translate significant portions) and mostly concerned with just the finds themselves. Ichthyovenator (talk) 00:26, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've done some copyediting - please make sure I haven't changed the meaning of anything seriously.
I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.
I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 17:14, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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