Talk:Parmelia barrenoae/GA1

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 15:10, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Nice to see a lichen, reading now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:10, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Characteristics of the thallus surface include tiny pores for gas exchange, and vegetative propagules called soralia. – When I read "Characteristics" I expect such that are characteristic for the species, i.e. distinguishing features. Are these?

They could be, depending on whether one is distinguishing between species in other similar genera or between other similar species in the genus, but I switched "Characteristics" for "Features" to hopefully reduce potential confusion. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

P. barrenoae – Sometimes you abbreviate the genus but sometimes not. This has confused me as a reader (thinking that, at the next instance where it was not abbreviated, that a separate genus is introduced). Consistency is key. I personally think we have enough space to always spell these names out, but your call.

I've spelled out all instances in the lead, and for the "Similar species" section, started out with a general sentence to alert the reader that it is genus Parmelia in the following discussion. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Image: "Parmelia submontana and P. sulcata are lookalikes" – Which is which?

Now specified. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

covered with small pits and depressions – pits and depressions, isn't that the same?

Having now consulted a dictionary, I agree. Trimmed. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

the central areas of the margins – "or"?

Correct, fixed. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Of this, the cortex is 25–37.5 µm thick, the photobiont layer, about 30–40 μm thick, the medulla 120–200 μm thick, and the underlying darkened cortex 25–40 μm thick. – Needs reformulation.

I removed the extraneous comma after "the photobiont layer" ... does it read ok now? Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

photobiont layer – link or explain?

I moved a later link up to here. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The marginal pseudocyphellae are more or less continuous, – are you talking about their distribution pattern on the thallus? Evenly distributed?

Yes; changed to your suggested wording. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

and the soredia are granular. – what are "soredia"?

Both soredia and soralia are now linked and parenthetically defined. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Rhizines on the black lower surface are moderately abundant. – lower surface of the thallus? That this is black seems significant, maybe worth to mention earlier and not just here as a side-note?

Done. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The photobiont partner of the lichen is a green alga from the genus Trebouxia.[2] – can these be various species, or is it a single species that is unidentified?

The latter; now mentioned. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Parmelia barrenoae could also be confused with P. submontana, … – source? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:42, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Oops - added. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

salazinic acid – link?

Already linked in the section right above. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Parmelia barrenoae has been proposed for use as an indicator of well conserved and sustainably managed forests. – Because of its sensitivity to pollutants mentioned in the next sentence? Then, it would make sense to swap these two sentences maybe?

Sure, done. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

A highly technical topic, but you did an excellent job explaining everything in a way that even I could follow almost completely (everything I didn't fully understand is marked above). I also like the "Similar species" section, very useful. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:06, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'm grateful for your helpful review Jens. I've responded to your comments above, and here's a diff showing the changes made. Esculenta (talk) 17:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the fixes, looks really good! And congrats for the GA :) --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:09, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]