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Reviewer: Truflip99 (talk · contribs) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Will start this soon. --truflip99 (talk) 18:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • the latter three from his 2017 album Fénix. -- of which the latter three are*
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • He is also known for making romantic songs within the reggaeton genre.[1] -- I listen to his music and I would challenge this claim. Most reggaeton music is like this. Also, the ref you provided doesn't exactly support this statement. I suggest omitting altogether.
 Done I removed the sentence. I do think it is important to have information about his musical/lyrical style in the lead, but I will try to come up with something better. Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • the release of the singles "Voy a Beber" and "Travesuras" in 2014 -- duplicate link
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • His success was furthered by the 2015 single "El Perdón" and his 2017 album Fénix. -- dup link
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nicky Jam has also acted in the films XXX: Return of Xander Cage (2017) and Bad Boys for Life (2020) -- comma after this
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nick Rivera Caminero was born on March 17, 1981 -- comma after full date
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • in Lawrence, Massachusetts -- also good practice to link first instance of a wiki page in body
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • to a Dominican mother and Puerto Rican father. -- link DR and PR
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Having been born on Saint Patrick's Day -- link St. Patty's Day
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • he developed an affinity for hip-hop -- link hip hop
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • However, in interview -- in an* interview
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • with Billboard -- link Billboard
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nicky Jam initially experienced culture shock -- link culture shock
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • having never spoken Spanish -- link Spanish language
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • was inspired to pursue a musical career. -- became* inspired
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • He also used Caribbean hip-hop and reggaeton -- link reggaeton
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • him to try cocaine -- link cocaine
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • little Mickey Mouse voice -- link Mickey Mouse
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • he continued to release the solo albums Haciendo Escante (2001) and Vida Escante (2004). -- Nicky Jam went on* to release
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • on-and-off -- I don't think you need the hyphens as this isn't a compound modifier
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 00:53, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • This led an incensed Nicky Jam to release a diss track in response in 2004. -- 2004 redundant, use "that same year"?
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

More in a bit. --truflip99 (talk) 16:26, 28 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much for your comments. I'll get right on it! Basilisk4u (talk) 00:39, 31 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great progress! Continue:

  • and soon after began touring together at the end of 2014. -- I would omit "soon after"
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • His increased popularity during this time led to Nicky Jam reuniting -- led Nicky Jam to reunite*
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • My bodyguard was like, ‘There's this woman outside. She's fighting with everybody saying she's your mom and she wants to see you... -- you forgot to close the quote
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The album reached the top of the Billboard Latin Rhythm Albums chart on February 11, 2017 -- comma after date
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • to the new singles "El Amante" and "Si Tú la Ves" featuring Wisin of reggaeton duo Wisin & Yandel -- "Si Tú la Ves", the latter featuring...
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • "sound has shifted from hard-hitting dembow...to more velvety rhythms and romantic lyrics." -- period after quote
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • he recalls that "I knew automatically -- he recalls, "I knew..."
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • The artist was first exposed to Caribbean music occurred upon -- The artist's first exposure to Caribbean music...
 Done Oh my goodness! Thanks for catching that. Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • Jay-Z's The Blueprint (2001) "gave [him] an idea of how to do [his] albums in the Spanish market and give [his] fans that kind of vibe." -- period after quote
 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 13:35, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good on prose. I will look at images and refs next. --truflip99 (talk) 21:02, 1 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hey thank you so much for your comments. I am a teacher and am just finishing up the last week of virtual teaching. I will get to your comments as soon as possible! Basilisk4u (talk) 22:16, 15 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Basilisk4u: Looking good!

  • No license issues for pics
  • Refs -- Link Billboard on first instance and remove any duplicates
  • Add accessdate to refs 31 and 40

That should be it. Placing on hold. --truflip99 (talk) 15:09, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Perfect, I made the changes and I think I caught all the duplicate Billboard links. Let me know if there's anything else I should do. Thanks so much for the review :) Basilisk4u (talk) 15:55, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Looks great! Passing. --truflip99 (talk) 16:08, 17 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]