Talk:KVOA/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)

Quite close already. Just a few copyedits and bits of context, and some possible images to add. Placing on hold so you have time to work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:51, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

@Pi.1415926535: Some sludge eluded me here, for sure. I think I was able to address every other issue and a redundant section I meant to remove, too! Should be ready for you to take a look. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:28, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: Looks good - happy to pass it. I would add the 39-hours-per-week tidbit to the news section so that it's not just in the lede (MOS:LEADREL is relevant), but that's not worth holding GA up over. Nice work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 05:35, 10 November 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• I don't see a need for the age of the station; that only seems relevant for recent/ongoing events.
• The lede is a bit thin. Maybe add a sentence about the news operation, and expand the history paragraph by 1-2 sentences?
  • Done. Their public file has a list of all their regular newscasts, so I was able to add an hours-a-week total which isn't always possible. I don't have a lot of info about their news op since, like, 2010, in the article, so this helps.

History

• Is it possible to provide a sentence of context (eg Due to X and Y, the FCC placed a moratorium on new television stations from 19xx to 19yy) and/or wikilink to another article that covers that?
• Might be worth clarifying that the radio stations applied for television channels.
• Wikilink coaxial cable
• The sentence beginning ABC programs moved... should probably be split in two.
• Alvarado isn't mentioned until it's sold. Seems like it should be named in the previous paragraph.
• The paragraph beginning In late June... is very short; perhaps merge it with the next paragraph.
• Split the run-on sentence beginning The FCC approved in November 1972...
• "golden age" is puffery (unless the sources specifically call it that) and should be replaced with more neutral wording.
• Similarly, "particularly remarkable" needs to be replaced.
• Another The station was acquired by H&C... - another that needs split
• hard-core porn → hardcore pornography
• This allowed KVOA to join...: This sentence is weirdly worded - "allowed" is not the right choice of word - and the mentions of the other stations aren't in the source. Given that the other incidents were 20 years prior, I think you can cut this sentence entirely.
  • Yeah, that sentence was a real leftover. And not a good one. This area needed a little more buffing.
• Remove "Also" in the final sentence.

News operation

• The first two paragraphs can be combined. (No change to the sentences needed.)
• Remove comma after "Cox cable"

Other

• Some free images from flickr that would be good to illustrate the article: news vehicle and Mount Bigelow antennas. (I think KVOA is the far right antenna.) I can transfer them from flickr if you need.

Overall

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: