Talk:Jesse L. Brown/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 14:14, 6 December 2011 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria[reply]

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
Don't capitalize naval unless it's a proper noun.
Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 19:06, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Don't you mean "his"? the schools closer to this family were lower-quality
Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 19:06, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Title capitalization in Ecker needs to be fixed. And DMY.
Fixed. —Ed!^(talk)
Actually, your changes here made it worse. The major words of the subtitle need to be capitalized. And fix the spelling of casualties. See Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style_(capital_letters)#Composition_titles.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:49, 7 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I fixed it as far as I am aware of the policy (capitalized the beginning of each phrase and the proper nouns. If this isn't the correct format I don't know what is. —Ed!^(talk) 00:20, 8 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You should have used Smith as your model; every significant word is capitalized, plus the first word. I did it for you.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:33, 8 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
How could his enlistment end on 15 April and he remain in the Navy?
Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 19:07, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Fixed everything. Thanks for your review! —Ed!^(talk) 19:06, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]