Talk:James Baxter the Horse/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:46, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Will have my comments up by the end of today or tomorrow by the latest. Aoba47 (talk) 17:46, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Remove “the” in front of “voiced by the Baxter the animator”.
I think you need to say California Institute of the Arts in its entirety when you first use it in the lead. You can put the shortened form in parenthesis after it so you can just use that form during the rest of the article, but I think you need to do so to help an uninformed reader. I could be wrong about this so let me know what you think.
The second Baxter in the third sentence of the second paragraph of the “Production” section can be replaced with “he” to avoid repetition of the name to say “suggested that he try animating…”
Inking should not be capitalized.

@Gen. Quon: Another relatively brief review, but I could not find much to correct in this article. A majority of the problem areas were addressed in the first review. Once my comments are addressed, then I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:09, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Thanks so much for this review, and thanks for catching those issues! How does it look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:16, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Gen. Quon: Everything looks good to go, and thank you for adding more about the reception to the lead as well. I will ✓ Pass this. I look forward to working with you in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 19:18, 9 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]