Talk:Inna (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:04, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

This is more of a clarification question, but is the title “Summer Days EP”. When looking it up on Google, I found some sources saying that it was just “Summer Days” so I just wanted to confirm either one with you.

No publication can know if the EP was titled Summer Days or Summer Days EP since it was never released. However, I do agree with you and since the majority of the sources refer to it as simply Summer Days, we're going to use that. Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would clarify that “Summer Days EP” is an extended play (as you do in the “Background and release” section) and then add a link for extended play.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

For this part (a preview of unreleased tracks on her), it should be “previews” instead of “a preview” as she uploaded multiple songs and not just one.

Not done There was only just one preview with multiple songs, so that's why I used that. Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the clarification. I have made a minor edit to better represent the information. Let me know if you disagree with it in any way. Aoba47 (talk) 22:07, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I think that the following sentence (The album was originally scheduled to be named Latinna (stylized as LatINNA), with the singer saying in an interview with Direct Lyrics in April 2014 that she "feels Latinna" (Latina) and has had notable success in Spanish-speaking, Latin-origin territories) would benefit from being split into two as it is covering a lot of content. I would have one sentence about the original album name and the second about her interview quote. On an unrelated note, it would cool if she ever re-used the LatINNA concept in the future.

Done Split in two and changed the sentence a bit to read better. After a research, I didn't find "LatINNA" to refer to anything else than her album, so I doubt the title was ever used for something else. Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Oh my gosh, I'm so dumb

I now understood what you said. It was kind of a compliment towards her word play, right? Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:21, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

No worries. The word play/pun is really good. I would love if she used that title for maybe a future album or EP (especially since she has the "Me Gusta" song that is very Spanish-themed). Aoba47 (talk) 22:30, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am certain about the "[she wants] that and [she feels] that right now” quote. I think you can paraphrase this in your own words to make the sentence stronger.

I really don't know how to paraphrase it. Could you help me out? Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would link extended play in this part (for the cancelled extended play Summer Days EP).

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

You link the cities in this part (such as Barcelona, Ibiza, Los Angeles and Copenhagen) if you would like. It is up to you.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would look through the second paragraph and revise it completely to have to read more clearly to someone unfamiliar with the subject matter. The release schedule for this is rather silly in my opinion, so it is difficult to present this information. I would recommend starting with the standard edition (Inna) and then moving to the Japanese edition. I just find this paragraph rather messy and confusing in its current state and it would benefit from revision.

I really tried to fix things that I noticed were poor, but I would greatly appreciate further instructions. Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Has Inna ever addressed why the release process for the album was so crazy?

No, she never adressed that thing in interviews. There aren't many where she speaks about the album, but the funny thing is that not all the stuff she said prior to its release corresponds with what actually happened. In a video, she even said that Inna was a follow-up to Summer Days, which "she did especially for her online fans", although never released as a stand-alone EP. Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Promotion and composition

For this part (encompassed saxophone and horn in its composition), I would change “encompassed” to “included”.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Revise this part (Commercially, the track experienced commercial success in Europe) to avoid the repetition of “commercial”.

Done Thia was just an issue I didn't see ;) Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Include ALT text for the Pitbull image.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

For this sentence (It is a dance-pop track that uses trumpets and "hedonistic and cheerful" simple lyrics.), I would group all of the sources together to avoid have a large grouping of sources at the end of this. If you do not know how to do that, I can do it for you. Also, why do you need so many sources for this sentence? Are all of these sources necessary? If possible, I would remove a few if you want to avoid grouping the sources together.

All the sources are relevant here as they all cite different things from the sentence. I remember this very well from its GAN process, where I was asked the same thing. Btw, could you help me out with the "grouping". I think I know what you mean, but I am not sure... Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Add the year in which “Got It” was released.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

For this sentence (Musically, it portrays an R&B-influenced dance-pop love track), the word “portrays” is not correct in this context. I would just say “it is an R&B-influenced”.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am confused by this sentence ("Bop Bop" followed in 2015 as the third release.) as in a previous part, you said that “Diggy Down” was the third single.

Done This was an issue I didn't notice; fixed it... Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am not a fan of this sentence (It features American singer Eric Turner and is of the dance-pop genre), particularly the “is of the dance-pop genre” part. I would revise it to avoid that as it reads awkwardly.

Done I'm sorry you have to read this over and over again in my GANs, but this is a mistake I've done in the past (but not now anymore). Fixed it... Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I am not sure what is meant by this part (similarly reaching number two in Romania.). “Diggy Down” reached number one so it is not necessary “similarly” if you are trying to make that comparison. I would just remove the word “similarly”.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would revise this part completely (with "Low" being a "chill-out" track about the singer's intimate moments with her suitor when the lights go down, emphasizing her vocals.). The part “he singer's intimate moments with her suitor when the lights go down” reads awkwardly and the part “emphasizing her vocals” appears to just be tacked on the end without really making it all work together.

Done Tried to make it better Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would revise this part (is of the deep house and electropop genre) as it reads awkwardly.

Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments

Good work with this. Once my comments are addressed, I will read through it another time. This article requires a good amount of work before it can be promoted to the GA level, but I am willing to work with you to get it up there. Aoba47 (talk) 18:42, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: I've just finished working on your first comments and I'm waiting for your next ones. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:38, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Verdict

Great work with this. I ✓ Pass this as a GA. Aoba47 (talk) 22:30, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.