Talk:Helmut Wick/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 01:06, 1 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this one soon.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:06, 1 December 2011 (UTC) GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria[reply]

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
This is awkward: He joined the military service of the Luftwaffe Is the part about the military service really necessary? When translating the German unit names, capitalize the English equivalents like 2nd Fighter Wing, etc. Get rid of the possessive in this: the Royal Navy’s Fairey Swordfish biplane Add a comma after At the end of the French campaign These are awkward and could be profitably combined: Reichsmarschall Hermann Göring had ordered Kriegsmarine torpedo boats on a search and rescue mission. Throughout the night the naval vessels searched for Wick
He joined the military service of the Luftwaffe: done MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:10, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

capitalize the English equivalents like 2nd Fighter Wing, etc.: done; does this also apply "wing commander", etc. MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:10, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That's a judgement call, but I would say not.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:35, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Get rid of the possessive in this: the Royal Navy’s Fairey Swordfish biplane: done MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:18, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

combine Reichsmarschall Hermann Göring had ordered Kriegsmarine torpedo boats on a search and rescue mission. Throughout the night the naval vessels searched for Wick: done MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:18, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Add a comma after At the end of the French campaign: done MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:18, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:
Link torpedo bomber, fighter, bomber, torpedo boat
done MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:10, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

B. Focused:
Have you tried to confirm if the RN lost Swordfish on the date that Wick made his claim?
Ringlstetter (page 31) is not very precise. I had a look here and aircraft of this type were lost but I can't easily map them. Would this not be original research? MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:32, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Only if you didn't have access to Peter Cornwall's The Battle of France Now and Then, which does not list any Swordfish or Albacores lost to any cause on 19 May.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:35, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
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