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Good articleHMS Duncan (1901) has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Good topic starHMS Duncan (1901) is part of the Predreadnought battleships of the Royal Navy series, a good topic. This is identified as among the best series of articles produced by the Wikipedia community. If you can update or improve it, please do so.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
December 27, 2018Good article nomineeListed
August 23, 2020Good topic candidatePromoted
Current status: Good article

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:HMS Duncan (1901)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one as well. Comments: Lead

  • Suggest linking 12-inch guns
    • Done
  • she was reorganized into the Home Fleet is potentially confusing, perhaps reword as transferred to the Home Fleet when the Mediterranean Fleet was reorganized into a squadron of it' or something similar
    • That works for me.
  • and converted 'was' may be necessary here
    • Fixed

More later. Kges1901 (talk) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks - I've fixed the Design section issues you highlighted in the Montagu/Cornwallis reviews, so hopefully that'll save you a little time ;) Parsecboy (talk) 17:22, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Operational history

  • In general, you have year duplication in this section
    • Fixed
  • four surviving sister ships of the Duncan class could just be 'surviving sister ships' and not mention class
    • Done
  • abolished temporarily suggest 'temporarily abolished'
    • Done
  • Duncan and her four Duncan-class sisters, as well as the battleships of the King Edward VII class, temporarily were transferred no need to mention class name again, suggest 'were temporarily transferred' instead
    • Done
  • Albemarle and the rest of the 3rd Squadron Shouldn't that be Duncan instead?
    • Indeed
  • use the fleet in an active way Suggest 'use the fleet for active operations'
    • Sounds good to me
  • neutral Greece 'neutral' is redundant
    • Good catch
  • dup link Salonika
    • Fixed
  • operations against Greek royalists what exactly were these operations?
    • Added a bit of detail on this
  • Is the shipbreaking company notable enough for a link?
    • Probably not
  • Suggest adding at least one image to the body, as the service history has no media currently
    • I don't know that there's a good option - I could do a map, but the ship kind of bounced around during the war and wasn't particularly active in any single area
  • No, he doesn't attribute any of the photos. I don't know what use the badge would be, apart from purely decorative. Unfortunately, the British pre-dreadnoughts don't have many pictures of them available online (that are easily provable to be in the public domain - my go-to resource is the NHHC's collection, but for whatever unknown reason, it doesn't include many British ships). Parsecboy (talk) 21:49, 27 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. Kges1901 (talk) 17:02, 27 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]