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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:14, 7 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take a look at this one. JAGUAR  17:14, 7 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

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  • "Other than that battle, and the inconclusive Action of 19 August" - why is this not written fully as Action of 19 August 1916?
  • "Barham was played a minor role in quelling" - removed 'was'
  • "At 18:17 he realized that" - realised, if you want to stay consistent with British spelling
  • "before she stabilized without any damage." - stabilised too
  • "Lützow was little bothered by these hits" - I don't understand this. Not sure if it sounds too informal here - does this mean she suffered little damage?
  • "Von Tiesenhausen was not certain of the results of his attack and radioed that he'd hit a Queen Elizabeth-class battleship with one torpedo" - he had
  • No dead links

This is a great article. Well written, comprehensive and very deserving of GA status. Once all of the above are clarified this should be good to go. JAGUAR  17:26, 7 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for catching these; this is exactly the kind of stuff I was looking for my reviewer to find.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:04, 7 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them! I'll promote this. I might review a few more soon. JAGUAR  13:07, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]