Talk:First Cevallos expedition

First Cevallos expedition was nominated as a Warfare good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (January 10, 2022). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

Military history: British / European / Spanish / Early Modern

This article is within the scope of the Military history WikiProject. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the project and see a list of open tasks. To use this banner, please see the full instructions.Military historyWikipedia:WikiProject Military historyTemplate:WikiProject Military historymilitary history articles

This article has been checked against the following criteria for B-class status:
Referencing and citation: criterion not met Coverage and accuracy: criterion met Structure: criterion met Grammar and style: criterion met Supporting materials: criterion met

Associated task forces:
/
	British military history task force
	European military history task force
	Spanish military history task force
	Early Modern warfare task force (c. 1500 – c. 1800)

Spain Start‑class Low‑importance

	Spain portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Spain, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Spain on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.SpainWikipedia:WikiProject SpainTemplate:WikiProject SpainSpain articles
Start	This article has been given a rating which conflicts with the project-independent quality rating in the banner shell. Please resolve this conflict if possible.
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.

Portugal Low‑importance

This article is within the scope of WikiProject Portugal, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Portugal on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.PortugalWikipedia:WikiProject PortugalTemplate:WikiProject PortugalPortugal articles

Low

This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.

Portugal To-do:

Find correct name The airport is not listed as João Paulo II anywhere. The airport's own website calls itself simply Ponta Delgada, and has no mention of João Paulo.

Improve key articles to Good article

Improve

Review

Category:History of Portugal: lots to remove there
Template:Regions of Portugal: statistical (NUTS3) subregions and intercommunal entities are confused; they are not the same in all regions, and should be sublisted separately in each region: intermunicipal entities are sometimes larger and split by subregions (e.g. the Metropolitan Area of Lisbon has two subregions), some intercommunal entities are containing only parts of subregions. All subregions should be listed explicitly and not assume they are only intermunicipal entities (which accessorily are not statistic subdivisions but real administrative entities, so they should be listed below, probably using a smaller font: we can safely eliminate the subgrouping by type of intermunicipal entity from this box).

Requests

See Requested articles

Assess

Help assessing articles.

Need images

Translate from Portuguese Wikipedia

Wikify

Vote:

Watch this list — Edit this list

Uruguay Mid‑importance

	Uruguay portal This article is part of WikiProject Uruguay, an attempt to expand, improve and standardise the content and structure of articles related to Uruguayan history. If you would like to participate, you can edit this article, or visit the project page, where you can join the project and see a list of objectives.UruguayWikipedia:WikiProject UruguayTemplate:WikiProject UruguayUruguay articles
Mid	This article has been rated as Mid-importance on the project's importance scale.

Argentina Mid‑importance

	Argentina portal This article is part of WikiProject Argentina, an attempt to expand, improve and standardise the content and structure of articles related to Argentine history. If you would like to participate, you can improve First Cevallos expedition, or sign up and contribute to a wider array of articles like those on our to do list.ArgentinaWikipedia:WikiProject ArgentinaTemplate:WikiProject ArgentinaArgentine articles
Mid	This article has been rated as Mid-importance on the project's importance scale.

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:First Cevallos expedition/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Eviolite (talk · contribs) 01:48, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow. eviolite (talk) 01:48, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

General notes:

Sources look good, however as I do not have access to them I cannot verify facts/lack of copyvio; will assume good faith though.
"Cevallo" in the lead - is this a typo?
May wish to add modern context that Colonia del Sacramento is in modern-day Uruguay
What national writing style is this article in? I see -ise spellings, but miles and MDY dates.
The two links to "Undeclared war" seem like WP:EASTEREGG links as people may expect them to lead to undeclared war - suggest rewording to incorporate the name of the war as well for clarity.

Background:

Spanish colonization of the Americas is probably a better link for "American colonies" than Spanish Empire
"arrived near the Colonia del Sacramento" - remove "the"

Expedition:

Add {{convert}} for "one and a half miles"
Link Mortar (weapon)
Add a comma after "Brigadier General Vicente da Silva da Fonseca"
"led two columns" - what does this mean?
"Portuguese governor Eloy Madureira" - governor of what?

Aftermath:

Not a big deal, but is it possible for the first quote to be paraphrased? The specific wording doesn't seem too pertinent.

@Pepperoni8pizza: see the above notes. The article is very good and is pretty close to GA, just have a few comments/suggested changes, so I'm placing it on hold for now so you can make them. Thanks, eviolite (talk) 14:13, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Pepperoni8pizza: Apologies but I have now taken a look at a copy of one of the books cited, specifically the Marley one, and I am pretty concerned about close paraphrasing. For example, I took a look at the "Siege of Colonia del Sacramento" section, and it is very similarly formatted and written as the source material, just with a few words swapped out, which is a copyright/plagiarism issue (see again the page on close paraphrasing.) As a result, and also since it's already been almost 7 days since I put the review on hold, I will unfortunately have to fail the nomination. You did very good work on the article but it needs to be reworded to fall into the guidelines for copyright violations. eviolite (talk) 03:22, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]