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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Nice work on this one. A few comments:

Lead
  • say what state it happened in in the first sentence
    • Done
  • link Union forces to Union Army
    • Done
  • Part of Price's fordce
    • Done, as well as fixing a tense switch later in the same sentence
  • "of Brigadier General Joseph O. Shelby's"
    • Done
  • "above the Union defenses at Byram's Ford"
    • Done
  • "Pleasonton broke through Marmaduke's position at Potato Hill"
    • Done
Body
  • suggest "The invasion was designed to start"→"It was hoped that the invasion would start"
    • Done
  • link infantry for infantrymen
    • I've already linked infantry in the last paragraph of the previous section; I'm not sure that the duplink would be necessary here
  • I would reorganise the explanation of the Confederate divisions in the order the commanders are named
    • Done
  • link militia
    • Done
  • active military movementoperations
    • Done
  • "Sanborn commanded the unitformation"
    • Done
  • who was William Fishback?
    • Glossed (a militia officer)
  • "would not permit the Kansas State Militia from movingto move further east"
    • Done
  • "Confederate troops attacked the rear guard"
    • Done
  • "a feint attack on the northern part"
    • Done
  • "while forcing his way across the river"
    • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 12:41, 18 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Union skirmishers back across the Big Blue" the 2nd Colorado Cavalry?
    • Source doesn't identify the troops
  • "the 2nd Colorado Cavalry reported"
    • Done
  • suggest "two units from his brigade – Nichols's Missouri Cavalry Regiment and Schnable's Missouri Cavalry Battalion – to reinforce Thompson."
    • Done
  • "Colonel B. Frank Gordon and thehis 5th Missouri Cavalry Regiment"
    • Done
  • did the ford where Gordon crossed have a name? Was his crossing opposed at all?
    • Neither Lause, Collins, Sinisi, Kirkman, or Monnett name the ford, so probably not. Added that the crossing occurred without incident.
  • "prevented from moving north by the Confederates" Slayback's battalion?
    • Source doesn't explicitly say this, referring to the Confederates who had poured through Hinkle's Ford
  • "but Moonlight failed todid not get the order" it is hardly a failure of Moonlight if he didn't get a message
    • Reworded, as possibly causing an indication of failure on Moonlight's part. "Failed to get/receive the order" is acceptable AmEng for when someone doesn't receive something even with no fault, though
  • "but was arrived at Hinkle's Ford"
    • Done
  • "so he sent Jackman's brigade to the south"?
    • Done
  • "way to Westport,; and Shelby" as there is internal punctuation within the latter two parts of the sentence
    • Done

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:52, 18 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • the header should read "October 23: Pleasonton crosses the river"
    • Corrected
  • "further to the west on a height known as Potato Hill" should say approx how far from the river, as it later becomes clear that it is only a short distance
    • Done
  • comma after "Battery H, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
    • Added
  • "Jackman withdrew from beforein the face of Sanborn's brigade."
    • Done
  • comma after "Battery L, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
    • Added
  • "Lause estimagtes"
    • Corrected
  • Note c. "Potato Hill was renamed to Bloody Hill after the battle"
    • Done

The images are appropriately licensed. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Nice job thus far. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:03, 19 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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