Talk:Amenhotep III/GA1

GA Reassessment

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I will be undertaking the GA Reassessment. H1nkles (talk) 17:18, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

*I've put a ^{[citation needed]} template after this sentence, "Around Year 36 of his reign, he also married Tadukhepa, the daughter of his ally Tushratta of Mitanni.".

*Per WP:BOLD you should refrain from using bold text in the body of the article. I'm assuming the large bold text in the "Life" section is a quote from the excavation of an artificial lake? If so then please follow the guidelines in WP:QUOTE for inserting a block quote. You have a block quote later in the section, not sure why the bold quote isn't also formatted the same. If I'm missing something please advise.

Is cite [20] supposed to reference the entire preceding para? There are a lot of assertions in the preceding paragraph and they should be referenced.
"Amenhotep III's refusal to allow one of his daughters to be married to the Babylonian monarch may indeed be connected with Egyptian traditional royal practices that could provide a claim upon the throne through marriage to a royal princess, or, it be viewed as a shrewd attempt on his part to enhance Egypt's prestige over those of her neighbours in the international world." This is speculation and unreferenced. Please provide citations.

*Another large bold block of text, see above.

~~In the "Court" section check the tense in this sentence, "There are many important men in office under Amenhotep III." "Are" should be "were"?~~
~~Ramose, Amenhotep, Aperel and Ptahmose, why link two and not all four, especially when one is a red link?~~

:*"They are known from a remarkable series of monuments, including the well known tomb of Ramose at Thebes (TT55)." Is TT55 a reference? If so we can't use WP articles to cite other WP articles. See this link for MOS info on this.

Consequently the "Court" section is unreferenced and needs to be referenced.

~~:*"Monuments" section Luxor Temple is linked twice, once is enough, same with Pylon (architecture).~~ ~~:*I added another ^{[citation needed]} template at the end of the "Death" section.~~

*Cite [47] "El-Amarna North Tombs" is a dead link and will need to be repaired. In the "See Also" section you have an external link entitled "Comemorative scarab of Amenhotep III", this is also a dead link.

See WP:CITE check the referencing on websites, they should include a publisher, author (if available), and accessdate.

Here are my primary concerns about the article in violation of the GA criteria:

Comprehensive-there isn't much mention of his lineage, the article could be developed there.
MOS compliance-The lead should be a summary of the article. Amenhotep's father and mother are mentioned in the lead but no where else, there is nothing about his accomplishments, later years and death. WP:CITE I'm concerned about some missing references and a couple of dead links, these need to be addressed. WP:QUOTE the quote formatting is not consistent and should be fixed, bold block text should conform to MOS standards.

I will put the article on hold for a week and await fixes. H1nkles (talk) 18:27, 9 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have started to look at all of the above, and have crossed out the ones I have done. Markh (talk) 21:41, 18 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]