Talk:2015 Rochelle–Fairdale tornado/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 16:30, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will do given the backlog. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:30, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"The 2015 Rochelle–Fairdale, Illinois tornado was an extremely violent and long-lived twister that tore through the communities near Rochelle and in Fairdale, Illinois in the evening hours of April 9, 2015. " you use "in" twice in one setynece and why the year in the date given it's a title. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed one usage of "in" and removed the year. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"On April 4, the Storm Prediction Center (SPC) issued their Day 6 severe weather outlook, highlighting a substantial and widespread risk for severe weather from southeastern Oklahoma to northeastern Illinois valid for April 9.[1] " link to Storm Prediction Center. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Modest surface heating ahead of the cold front allowed mid-level CAPE values to reach 1,000–1,500 J/kg, and a mass of rich moisture transported northward from the Gulf of Mexico pushed dewpoints into the lower 60s °F across the Enhanced risk area.[6] " explain/link CAPE and convert units (J/kg) and (F). YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked CAPE. I've never seen CAPE used outside J/kg, and lower 60s isn't really an exact value to convert to. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Winds at 850mb strengthened at or above 45 mph (75 km/h) atop winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) at 700mb," see above. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Okay. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Link to states on their first useage. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Isolated shower activity had already begun forming across the region just prior to the issuance of watch,[8] eventually growing into a line of strong to severe thunderstorms, including supercells.[9]" link/explain supercells and change "had already begun forming" to "starting to develop". YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Changed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"The weather forecast office upgraded to a tornado warning" upgraded what? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Expanded. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"This was one of several tornadoes observed across the Central United States on April 8 and April 9." source? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Sourced. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" A well-constructed barn was completely obliterated, and a 40 ft (13 yd) reinforced concrete silo was reduced to a pile of rubble" convert to meters not yards. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" A 67-year-old woman and her 69-year-old neighbor both were killed in their homes, and an additional 11 people were injured throughout the town." don't think you need both. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Of course it's important, it's causality info. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Near the intersection of Irene Road and McNeal Road, a well-built 7-year-old-house lost its second story and many exterior walls. " spell out seven YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Governor Bruce Rauner declared DeKalb and Ogle counties as state disaster areas, freeing up a wide variety of resources for response efforts. Both the governor and Illinois U.S. Senator Mark Kirk toured the area.[23" link to List of Governors of Illinois and United States Senator here. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, its good. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:53, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the speedy review. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 19:56, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]