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GA Review

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Reviewer: BigDom 20:26, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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Lead
  • "Entering this race also marked the first of three races that Carl Edwards is on probation, after his altercation with Brad Keselowski..." — this is slightly unclear, and in any case it should be in the past tense. Something like "The race marked the first of three races for which Carl Edwards was on probation after a previous altercation with Brad Keselowski..."
  • Well, yes, of course I read the sentence. The change I meant to propose was as follows: "The race marked the first of three races for which Carl Edwards was on probation after an altercation with Brad Keselowski at the previous race at Atlanta Motor Speedway, which sent him airborne and crashed on his sidedoor." —Preceding unsigned comment added by BigDom (talkcontribs)
  • Shouldn't have spaces between punctuation and citations, and where there are multiple citations there shouldn't be spaces between them. This applies throughout the article, not just the lead.
  • "13 different leaders, 39 lead changes, 10 cautions" -> "13 different leaders, 39 lead changes and 10 cautions"
  • Why does the lead say there were 103 laps, when the infobox and the race summary say there were 500?
  • "This marks the end of a long streak of sellout seats at the track, which can seat up to 158,000; only 138,000 attended the race" -> "The race attendance of 138,000 marked the end of a long streak of sellout seats at the track, which has a capacity of 158,000"
Practices and Qualifying
Race summary
Results
  • The way the results are cited, it appears at first glance as though it is only a reference for Jimmie Johnson, rather than a general reference for the entire table
One last point

Criteria check

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GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    Some good work done by the nominator to sort out the references.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    I made a couple of image layout fixes myself
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Summary

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A pretty good article overall, which is very comprehensive in its coverage of the race but has a few problems, mainly Manual of Style issues. Once these have been sorted out, I will happily pass this as a GA. On hold for seven days. BigDom 21:05, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Problems have been suitably addressed. Pass with congrats. BigDom 23:16, 7 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]