Talk:Never Grow Up/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Gained (talk · contribs) 17:38, 27 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: IanTEB (talk · contribs) 19:54, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This is under an ongoing title move request, but I don't think that presents a problem for a GA review.

Checklist

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Background and composition

unable to do with the people she had met in real life - 'real life' could be shortened to just 'life'.
[3] only mentions that Swift conceived the album from two years of emotions, not that it had been in the works for two years, unless I'm missing something.
- Changed to "She included all of the emotions she felt in the last two years on the album"
The archived [4] (Songwriter Universe) takes me to the main page where I don't see any content pertaining to the album.
she is accompanied by a background male vocalist - is it not known who the background vocalist is? This article also lacks a Personnel section for the 2010 version, but so do the other articles on songs from this album so I assume that information is not available.
- Yes, the credits for the individual album tracks are not available.
I'm unable to access the live version of [11] but the archive works fine. It's either a regional thing, or the source has become dead (the article on HitFix seems to suggest the latter).
- It's the latter.
with some believing that it would have been for her 2006 self-titled studio album - shouldn't 'would' be 'could'?
What does 'older than her years' mean? Her age?
- I believe so according to my interpretation of the quote.
Verified: [1], [2], [8], [9], [10], [12], [17], [18], [19], [20], [21], [22], [24], [25], [26]. Assuming good faith on print sources

Release and live performances

I don't see Big Machine Records within [23] (AllMusic), but I am unfamiliar with navigating the site so it might be under a section I'm missing
- Replaced with the Apple Music source
Swift performed 'Never Grow Up' at selected locations of the album's associated world tour in 2011 - I would prefer the tour is mentioned by name (Speak Now World Tour), but it is only a preference
- I personally prefer the former but I get why you prefer the latter.
via=Newspapers.com should be added to [28] and [30]
[31] (Washington Post) should have subscription access clarified in the citation using url-access=subscription
the second child of her friend, the actress Jaime King - changing this to 'the second child of her friend and actress Jamie King' might be a more clear alternative to this text. When I first read the text, I mistakenly thought that the actress was Swift's godchild.
- I changed it to "her godson and the second child of the actress Jaime King" and removed "her friend" because I think it's not necessary.
Verified: [29], [32], [33], [34]

Critical reception

It seems [17] (Los Angeles Times) needs a url-access=subscription
[38] redirects me to a rather sketchy website, but the archive works fine. URL status should possibly be changed to dead, if it is not a regional issue
- The original link works for me just fine and it shows the album review. I believe it's a regional issue.
'where Swift actually changes it up' - 'where' should be moved out of quotations
showcased Swift's skill of 'taking common country-radio templates and perfecting them' - I think this sentence is a slight exaggeration of the source. Heaton writes that "sometimes, like on the parent-to-child ballad 'Never Grow Up', Swift seems capable of...". 'Seeming capable of' doesn't technically mean that the writer believes her to absolutely have that skill.
- Changed to "showcased Swift's potential capability"
The Oklahoman believed it was one of the tracks where Swift gives a break to the album's 'tabloid marathon' - is also a bit of an exaggeration, albeit in the opposite direction of above. Lang states that tracks like this make the album not a tabloid marathon, whilst the current text implies that he thought that the rest of the album was so.
Changed to "The Oklahoman believed it was one of the tracks that does not make the album a 'tabloid marathon'"
included in the rankings of Swift's discography by Jane Song and a staff of Paste (56) - like done above when specifying that Nathan Chapman played the song's guitar, it might be best to put '(at 56)' for the first entry here for clarification.
[48] (Vulture) places the song at 92, but the article says 94
Verified: [35], [6], [39], [47], [19], [12]

"Never Grow Up (Taylor's Version)"

that it was further heighten by Swift being an adult - shouldn't 'heighten' be heightened'?
that although her singing may seem jarring at first but her - I would change this to 'although her singing may seem jarring at first, her...'
The credits lack citation
- Added
Verified: [55], [56], [57], [58], [59], [60]

Conclusion

Mostly minor issues, I hope nothing is too much of a bother to alter. There isn't any illustration, but I don't know if anything would really help the article (expect an audio sample, maybe?) so I don't think it's a problem. IanTEB (talk) 19:54, 23 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, @IanTEB! Thank you for choosing this to review. I'll be addressing your points at the end of the week. As for illustrations, I don't think an audio sample would help due to how simple the production and lyrics are, and I believe readers can imagine the music and lyrics just by reading the prose so I don't think it is necessary. Gained (talk) 10:15, 24 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hey @IanTEB! All of your points have been addressed, and I have left comments on some of the points while the rest were done or fixed. A few of the points were done by @Dcdiehardfan (thanks btw!). Gained (talk) 01:27, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This was a quick review (was gonna say swift, but I realized my error). I edited a few small points that I missed; I'm happy to pass this. IanTEB (talk) 15:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]