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Reviewer:Hurricanehink (talk) 18:16, 21 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • "The fourth tropical cyclone, named storm, and hurricane of the 1967 Atlantic hurricane season, Doria developed on September 8 off the coast of Florida" - I think you could get away with just "the fourth named storm and hurricane", since there weren't too many classified TD's back then (I think). Also, you should specify which coast of Florida
  • I would specify which state Doria struck in the lede. Also, you should say how it moved south- and southeastward after moving ashore
  • "The storm is estimated to have organized into a tropical depression at 0000 UTC on September 8.[2] At the time, it was situated north of Grand Bahama Island." - both are pretty short sentences. Any way for merger?
  • What caused its early erratic motion? (drifting west, accelerating northeast)
  • "However, relatively quickly, its forward motion slowed and it once again strengthened" - try rewording the first portion of that sentence. It still trips me up
  • "It approached the Mid-Atlantic States with similar a similar intensity, track, and forward speed as the 1933 Chesapeake–Potomac hurricane" - aside from the brain glitch, I totally disagree. The 1933 cane was coming from the southeast and struck North Carolina. Doria came from the east-northeast and struck Virginia
  • "It dissipated on September 21" - can you combine that with another sentence?
  • I'd specify what state Wallops Island is in
  • Is there any more impact? It seems pretty scant for a landfalling tropical storm. The only actual damage is - "At Ocean City, Maryland, a boardwalk sustained storm-related damage" ...
  • Why the link to 1969 Atlantic hurricane season?

On hold for now. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:16, 21 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Juliancolton (talk) 20:18, 22 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, my only outstanding concern is there not being that much impact. I'm sure there are more than two stories in Google news that would be useful. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 00:44, 23 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]