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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 02:42, 13 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Great episode. I will review soon. Ruby 2010/2013 02:42, 13 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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  • There are some link issues
  • I'm not sure how long the episode was (perhaps add the length to the infobox), but the plot summary is too lengthy. For instance, is it really necessary to include C-3PO getting high off the marijuana R2-D2 had given him earlier?
  • "Peter decides to retell the story of A New Hope" -> Peter decides to retell the story of Star Wars: A New Hope
  • Are you sure Moving Picture Experts Group is the right link for MPEG?
  • "The Rebel fighters attack the Death Star, but, they suffer heavy losses during the assault" - improper use of comma
  • The production section needs a copy edit. See for example, "Family Guy creator Seth MacFarlane explains that the reason they made a complete parody out Star Wars in particular was because everyone in their staff loved the films and were excited to do this project. Another reason Star Wars was chosen, was because Lucasfilm allowed them to create it." I suggest you carefully go through it again or get someone from the GOCE to go through it
  • "The episode was written by Alec Sulkin, who has been with the show since the fourth season. It was directed by series veteran Dominic Polcino, who has been directing for the series since its first season." - much of this infromation is not covered in the source
  • "MacFarlane stated that while they thought of doing an Indiana Jones or a Wrath of Khan parody, they could not, because they would not get permission from owners of those properties (in this case Paramount Pictures) " - this isn't really true. Rather, MacFarlane says, "I can't imagine in a billion years that Paramount would give us permission." It would be better if you said that MacFarlane assumed they would be unable to gain permission
  • There's more you can pull from that interview, such as the part about Stewie not looking like Darth Vader
  • Beware of overlinking
  • "Blue Harvest" contains many references to the popular culture. The episode contains a lot of Star Wars related references - redundant. Try: "Blue Harvest" contains many references to popular culture, particularly to the first Star Wars film, or something similar
  • When Peter is about to being - begin?
  • the film Gia(which Jolie acted in) - space needed
  • Some helpful links that could help improve article - [1] [2][3]

I stopped in the cultural references section, which also needs a lot of work. I was thinking about failing this on account of its poor prose, but I'll place it on hold if you feel you can improve it within a week's time. I'll complete the review after you've responded here. Thanks. Ruby 2010/2013 19:12, 16 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

More comments
  • Archive footage of Leslie Nielsen's role in the movie Airplane! was used to voice Nielsen's character, who makes a short appearance in the episode. - source? I would probably just delete it, since you mention in the cultural refs section anyway
Removed.
  • the "liberal galactic media is saying that they are saying that the planet Hoth is melting - is that really what he said? he says "saying" twice?
Fixed.
  • "ribald but often hilarious satire of fantasy favorite" - is that all there is to the quote? It seems short and abrupt. Do they mean a fantasy favorite?
That is the whole quote.
  • What makes this a reliable source?
Removed.
  • You reference two IGN reviews but only provide one citation
Added.
  • "MacFarlane stated that if the episode did well and Lucasfilm was satisfied they would work on making a sequel." - source?
Removed.

Ruby 2010/2013 19:58, 19 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Alright fixed your new concerns added two of the links that you suggested. Any other specific concerns I may address. Pedro J. the rookie 01:56, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Yet more comments
  • Add more production info to lead (i.e. MacFarlane was a huge fan etc.)
  • The lead could also a brief mention of the cultural references section, considered this section takes up such a large portion of the article
  • Article needs ratings info Ruby 2010/2013 19:10, 26 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I believe I fixed those concerns. Pedro J. the rookie 19:34, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry for the delay. I and another editor question the reliability of YourEntertainmentNow.com. Please find an alternative source for the ratings. Ruby 2010/2013 02:04, 6 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I've looked in most spots were these ratings are found and I didn't find anything. For example I checked the TV by the Numbers page for the date of the episode and it was not marked. Pedro J. the rookie 20:54, 20 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
FWIW, I did a search of my own yesterday and could not find ratings for the episode at all, anywhere. Even the usual go-to places came up empty. Wizardman 23:14, 22 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
A search on Highbeam came up with: <ref>{{cite web|url=http://www.highbeam.com/doc/1G1-169824173.html|title=Sunday football gives big kick to Fox, NBC|last=Kissell|first=Rick|date=September 26, 2007|work=[[Daily Variety]]|accessdate=November 23, 2012}} {{Subscription needed}}</ref> See for example: (there's more)

...Fox's one-hour season premiere of "Family Guy" (5.6/13, 10.81m)....
Football game was the highest-rated primetime telecast on any net. since the "American Idol" finale on Fox last May, while "Family Guy" had its best numbers since May 2005 with a "Star Wars"-themed episode.
Combined, football on NBC and "Family Guy" on Fox drew 48% of the male 18-34 audience during Sunday's 9 o'clock hour.

Ruby 2010/2013 00:40, 23 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Pedro J. the rookie 01:21, 26 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Since that was the last thing to be addressed, this article now passes. Wizardman 00:22, 30 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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